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[小说连载][原创]赌（１） -- 250 - (2078 Byte) 2006-3-19 周日, 23:45 (2773 reads) |
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作者：ferncrest 在 海归茶馆 发贴, 来自【海归网】 http://www.haiguinet.com
i'm 2 busy at the moment.
but if u want to listen. I'd say it can be better if u try harder. i think there's some common sense issues. for instance, the way those 2 gentlemen express themselves make me think they're non-Americans (as i think typical Americans wouldn't hold such thoughts).
besides, there isn't much suspense in this episode. u mght be able to perform better if u keep writing...
well, i encourage u to keep working if u really intend to bring out an good piece(maybe masterpiece someday). and it's good to see ur next works.
by the way, i once dreamed of writing a English novel but...hehe.
there aren't much sciense/action/mystery chinese fictions at all, which is a shame. do hope u can be the first few to work out a good one!
作者：ferncrest 在 海归茶馆 发贴, 来自【海归网】 http://www.haiguinet.com
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 [小说连载][原创]赌（１） -- 250 - (2078 Byte) 2006-3-19 周日, 23:45 (2773 reads) - 五哥是Ｂ型血么？ -- 沙妙 - (0 Byte) 2006-5-11 周四, 01:32 (258 reads)
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